I spy with my little eye

A sound jarred me awake. Heart thundering in my chest, I tried to put myself back to sleep but the sound, like a saw mutely but determinedly cutting through wood, wouldn’t let me. So I got off the bed, needing to see what the fuss was about.

As my legs hit the floor, I realized I was a lot closer to the ground than I was used to. I looked at my hands and feetโ€ฆthey were definitely smaller. I was clutching onto Mr. Bears and it struck me that I was 8 years old.

I walked around my bed, shifting Mr. Bears to my front, holding him like a shield. The sound was at once hypnotising and unpleasant, forcing me to put one foot in front of the other, unable to bear the mystery.

I reached my window and peeped outside. I saw two figures, on top of each other on my front garden. Going red in the ears, thinking mummy and papa were indulged in some adult activity I turned around, ready to go back to bed.

But then that sound came againโ€ฆwhispering on the breezeโ€ฆlike a slow, harsh rubbing. I turned back to the scene. This time, the two figures took on sharper outlines. It was definitely a man and a woman but it wasnโ€™t mummy and papa. The man was staring at me, his eyes glassy. In an instant I knew he was dead. Biting my fingers to stop me from screaming, Mr. Bears no longer a shield but as petrified as me, I saw with horrified fascination as the woman with practiced ease hacked through the dead manโ€™s leg.

When another sound jarred me from my concentration on what was happening outside my window, I was in bed, back to my 23-year-old self.

I turned to my partner and let lose a muted scream. For a tense moment it felt like the woman from my dream was lying beside me, blood dripping from her nose, and spattered on her clothes and bedsheet. The moment passed but the feeling remained. I was too afraid to verify so went back to sleep, turning away from my partner, curling into myself, clutching an imaginary Mr. Bears, my shield and protector.

To this day, I don’t know what I saw outside my window when I had been 8 years old. Nothing was reported in the papers, there was no gossip that my parents had to shield me from, no tense whisperings in school. All I know is, a ghost has been haunting me for the past 15 years and it has an uncanny knack of showing up every time I am close to being happy.


Written as part of the #WordsMatter Blog hop hosted by Corinne, Shalini and Parul. Happy to take this baton on from Keerthi and passing it onto Vinitha.

35 responses to “I spy with my little eye”

  1. Oh my god! I’m still terrified typing this comment. You have amazing story telling skills, Suchita.

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    1. Awe thanks Nitisha. Glad it scared you ๐Ÿ˜›

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    aseemrastogi2

    Wow! Brilliantly narrated. For a moment, I was just wondering if it was a real incident / story.

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    1. It’s not a real incident. Just a story. Thank much Aseem ๐Ÿ™‚

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    Anagha Yatin

    I got spooked! From 23 something to 8 year old and back to 23 in whirlwind of chilling drama…gosh that was phenomenal!
    Tum khati kya ho Suchita! You have such a gift of imagination! Take a bow.

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    1. Haha thanks so much Anagha. Bas imagination kabhi kabhi surprise kar deti hai with what it produces!

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  4. I hope that’s not a real story cos you scared me. Any child or even adult would be scared if they saw something like this. I loved your narration and how you built that suspense. Well done, Keerthi. Thank you for joining us on #WordsMatter. Your post was brilliant!

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    1. I am sorry, Suchita. I wrote Keerthi by mistake. My bad. ๐Ÿ˜ฆ

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    2. Thanks Parul. It isn’t a real story. Glad you enjoyed the story and thank you for the warm welcome ๐Ÿ™‚

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  5. woaa that ending is so creepy! Loved the story… especially since it is open-ended.

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    1. Glad you enjoyed it!

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  6. That image isn’t going to leave my mind for a while! Something like that can scar forever! Lovely narrative.

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    1. Thanks much Jyothi.

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  7. Perhaps there was nothing but the 8 year old’s imagination, who knows? The mind has this uncanny knack of holding on to things we have imagined at that time. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. So true Vinay. Maybe the ghost is a ghost of her making and its just easier to blame him than to take responsibility – we don’t know. Thanks for stopping by ๐Ÿ™‚

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  8. It’s too real to be fiction. Or, you are just that good?
    I wish you had written more ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Haha maybe I am that good – at pretending – you’ll never know! But seriously, it is fiction. Thanks!

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  9. You got me hooked from the first line itself. Lovely narrative and brilliant one is the open ending!! Normally people choose to close that ending but you left it out open, so this story of yours keeps lingering in readers mind

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    1. I love leaving open endings – especially in short stories. Thanks Suhasini!

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  10. Now this is sight now one should see. Also this is going to be embedded in my memory for a long time to come. Simply brilliant!

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    1. Thanks Mayuri ๐Ÿ™‚

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  11. Is this for real? I mean, that is so scary! Hugs, Suchita. I can totally understand and this is exactly what you call haunted by the horrors of your past. Phew!
    Thank you for participating in the bloghop. Hope you are having fun!

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    1. Not real – piece of fiction. Yes glad to be participating but yet to go through others’ writing. Been unwell. Glad you found it scary, my job is done ๐Ÿ˜›

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  12. I loved your narration, Suchita. But this tale is a daunting one. I hope the next when the girl wakes up to a unwelcome sound it would be to a beautiful scene and her memory of this unknown ghost would be replaced with a beautiful tale. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. The girl hopes that too I am sure. Thanks Vinitha.

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  13. Absolutely riveting. Like everyone else, I sense a certain amount of ‘reality’ in this story. Do tell.

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    1. I should be flattered that everyone thinks its real – but its not – its fiction.

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  14. Obsessivemom Avatar
    Obsessivemom

    This sounds too real for comfort. So is it? It’s not fair to leave it to us to figure this out. Not fair.

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    1. Hahaha had I known readers will get confused, I would have mentioned it right at the beginning – it is a piece of fiction.

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  15. OMG what a story, is it really true that for 15 years you are haunted every time you see outside the window happily… no way…
    If its fiction it’s awesome but if it’s true I wish you peace and no more haunting images near you.

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    1. Awe thanks Pragun but you can be assured, it is a fiction piece.

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  16. Omg!! That was chilling and haunting! I honestly hope it was a fictional piece! Brilliant, visual and spooky narration!

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    1. It is fiction – and glad it spooked you – that was the point ๐Ÿ˜€

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  17. Brilliant narrative. You had me hooked to the story. It is very clever of you to leave the ending to the imagination of the reader. Wait! It was a just a fictional piece right? (Wink)

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    1. Thanks much Keerthi. Yesss it is a fictional piece.

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