Bargain

Bargain

Ramshackle does not ask for Kilney’s coat or umbrella. He thinks the man would prefer to keep them handy. He notices the way Kilney’s eyes turn round with disbelief at the smooth wooden panelling, the way the air and light pulse with life through the rooms and the general sense of well-being that emanates from the interiors.

Ramshackle doesn’t feel any of this but he knows this because his past clients have told him as much. That as soon as they step through the threshold, it’s like they have left their imperfect world behind and stepped into a perfect one.

He leads Kilney into an office and the man can’t help but snort at the arrogance of having a space like that. People like him are struggling to hold onto properties that have a room and a kitchen. And then there is Ramshackle, with so much wealth that he can simply turn a bedroom into an office.

β€œIs there a problem? Would you perhaps like a lozenge?”

The snort this time is louder. β€œI think I’m all clear now. Should we sit?”

Kilney decides he has given enough control to the man in front of him. It is time to take some back. He settles onto a chair and almost moans in delight. It’s a bloody comfortable chair. Ramshackle chuckles softly so it doesn’t affect the man’s pride. He takes the opposite chair, keeping the desk between them.

Ramshackle has a curious need to soothe Kilney. He tries to find a posture that wouldn’t intimidate the man but the more he tries, the harder he fails. So, he lets his body guide him into a pose. He sits with his hands crossed on the table, looking alert but mild.

Kilney is not a tall man. He’s not even a handsome man. There’s something about him around the mouth that speaks of a cruel streak. His suit is black, uninspiring but the shirt is snow white which serves to give him some character. He is a man’s man and it’s hard for him to swallow his pride and say what he has come here for.

It doesn’t help that Ramshackle’s face does not resolve into knowable features. Ramshackle may have eyes, nose, mouth, eyebrows and ears but they feel like ornaments. Like a pearl waiting for the right dress to be paired with.

The office is making his skin crawl and Kilney blurts out, β€œI don’t wish to die.”

Ramshackle smiles. Though he means it to be just a smile, it comes across as predatory. β€œYou’re quite safe, I assure you. You haven’t signed the contract yet.”

Kilney swallows. He wishes he could remove his coat and loosen his tie. It’s stifling hot and he’s hyperventilating. Incongruously, he feels a cool breeze in his hair, a coat rack appears to his left, as if in anticipation and a glass of water materializes from thin air.

He is shaking inside, he knows he is, but outwardly, he looks cool as a cucumber. To prove to himself how calm he really is, he picks up the glass. Pretending he sees magic like this every day, he takes a sip and says nonchalantly, β€œAre you trying to scare me Mr. Ramshackle?”

Ramshackle rubs a finger between his eyebrows as if asking for patience. β€œMr. Kilney, as your research would have informed you, the house mirrors whatever will make you most comfortable. It’s part of the service, that’s all.”

They don’t speak for a time, Ramshackle waiting, Kilney trying to find familiar ground.

When minutes pass and Kilney makes no further requests – of him or the house – Ramshackle finally says, β€œWould you like to see the contract?”

Contracts are something Kilney understands, he is a lawyer after all. So, he nods eagerly. He does not flinch when a piece of paper appears on the table and Ramshackle pushes it towards him.


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24 responses to “Bargain”

  1. hmm wonder what is in the contract?

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    1. Sabr karo πŸ˜€

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  2. I am somehow intrigued by their names which kind of reflects their personalities. And the magic element was quite intriguing. Would love to see where this goes.

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    1. Names are my specialty πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€ glad to know you’re intrigued.

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  3. The underlying tension is palpable. I could actually see the room with its wood panelling and the chair must be the best ergonomic one available. Hungry to read more now.

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    1. So happy to know the words are coming alive for you, thank you.

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  4. Ohhhh! There is magic too! Beginning to like Mr Ramshackle!

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    1. πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€

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  5. Well, well! Just as I was beginning to analyze the human personalities, you went ahead and added two even more intriguing elements to the mix. The House…and the Contract.

    Wonderful narration Suchita.

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    1. Thank you so much!

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  6. It’s like watching a gripping TV series. BTW I have already picturized Kilney as a hybrid of Anthony Hopkins and Ralph Fiennes.

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    1. You’re very kind, thank you. And what an interesting hybrid! Love it πŸ™‚

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  7. Lawyers know contracts are tools for argument, right? πŸ™‚

    Ramshackle may have eyes, nose, mouth, eyebrows and ears but they feel like ornaments. Like a pearl waiting for the right dress to be paired with.

    ROFL!! Be kind to him.

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    1. Haha Ramshackle is not human so he doesn’t mind (much) πŸ˜€

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  8. Thrilling with a touch of magicβ€”completely irresistible! I wish I could say, please release all the parts at once because this is something I’d love to devour in one go. The suspense is absolutely exhilarating!

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    1. You’re very sweet, thank you so much πŸ’›

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  9. Deepti Menon Avatar
    Deepti Menon

    What a great house to be in… one that makes you comfortable! Kilney is getting on my nerves! 😬😬 I guess that is your intention, Suchita.

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    1. Haha Kilney will grow on you – wait for it πŸ™ˆ

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  10. The house mirrors whatever will make you most comfortable?
    Ye BMC ko padhao koi πŸ˜‚

    I’m liking Kilney lesser and lesser somehow. Will hold my judgment though

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    1. It’s out of syllabus for BMC πŸ˜› πŸ˜€

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  11. Tulika Avatar

    The tension is building so well. Oh and I could do with a house that would understand what makes me comfortable.

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    1. Yesss that kind of a house would be quite cool.

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  12. Srivalli Rekha Avatar
    Srivalli Rekha

    Ohh… I want to see the place too! Why do I feel like Kilney needs a bigger shock, lol?

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    1. Haha he will be getting a lot of shocks πŸ˜€

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