Daiquiri Dreams

Daiquiri Dreams

The bar is sticky to the touch like it has absorbed as much alcohol as it can and is now oozing it back out. Ramshackle is sitting on a bar stool, a glass of daiquiri in front of him. Though it is uncomfortable, sitting with his arms crossed across his chest rather than resting comfortably on the bar, he doesn’t think his deep burgundy suit will appreciate the abuse.

A short bald man approaches him from his left, standing on tiptoes to lean on the alcohol-soaked bar. Ramshackle does not turn immediately. His face hasn’t settled yet into features that the client would find comforting. It takes longer than usual but Ramshackle finally turns to the man.

Despite his vast repertoire of words, the only word he can use to describe this man is dirty. His nails are black, there is hair where hair shouldn’t grow and his clothes are thin and fraying. His eyes are yellow and his lips black.

“Guvnor, I have heard you provide a certain service.” The man looks here and there and finding the room quite uninterested in what business the two are conducting, carries on, “Women,” he breathes, “if you get my meaning.”

Had Ramshackle been human, he would have recoiled from the putrid breath. But he is no man or woman. He takes a sip of his rum, lime and sugar concoction, savouring the liquid heat that spreads from his throat to his insides.

He says, “It comes at a price.”

The dirty man’s face scrunches up in anger. He slaps the bar. “I’m good for it. I always pay for services rendered.”

Ramshackle hums. “Come with me then.”


The house that Ramshackle takes the man to looks remarkably like the house that Kilney sees, three years from now, but the interior has changed to suit the needs of its current supplicant.

From the outside, the house looks a warm walnut brown, gleaming in the setting sun. It looks inviting and makes the man tremble in anticipation.

As soon as the door opens though, the house has been transformed. It looks nothing like it had when Kilney had walked in. Right now, it looks dusty, in disrepair and smells of abandonment. The man takes little notice. Who he is, is reflected so perfectly in the house that he feels at ease.

Instead of an office, there is a drawing room. It has faded sofas, a muddy brown, and a low table that, much like the bar, is covered in stains and rings from glasses and cups. The curtains have flower motifs but it’s impossible to tell the colour. They’re dull like the sun has leached away all their life.

Ramshackle and the man sit opposite each other. He says, “You will have to sign a contract.”

The man is taken aback. No brothel has ever asked him to sign one; and he has visited many. The only thing they have asked of him is to pay upfront. Which he has happily done. He removes his wallet from the inside pocket of his coat. He opens its maw and shows him the neat line of currency.

“Like I says, guvnor. I’m good for it.”

Ramshackle shakes his head. He’s irritated because the man doesn’t seem to get the kind of bargain he’s offering. He decides to say it in words he’d understand.

“For twenty-four hours with whatever and whoever you want, the payment is your life. You will die once your time is up. That is why there is a contract. Do you understand?”

The man pales. To be fair, his contact had told him that the payment would be his life, but he had thought they were exaggerating.

He can leave. He knows that too. The contact had told him that if he changed his mind, Ramshackle would let him leave, even if he had signed the contract. But this is the only place where every desire of his can be fulfilled, without any ramifications. And that is too good an opportunity to miss.

“I’ll get whateva I want? And no police, no nothing?”

Ramshackle nods.

“And I die after?”

“Yes.”

“What do you do with our bodies…souls…whatever?”

“I have certain…needs. As do you. And this arrangement helps us both.”

The man does not look alarmed as he asks, “Yous going to eat my corpse guvnor?”

“In a way. But not the way you think. Are you ready to sign?”

“Give me,” he says simply.

The man looks at the burgundy suit, the polished shoes and the slicked-back hair. He looks at Ramshackle’s face which looks like nothing. He realizes that if a policeman were to ask him for a description, he’d have a hard time saying anything. He can’t even guess Ramshackle’s eye colour or age. He doubts that’s his actual name. And yet, he grabs the pen and signs the contract.

“There. Now,” he rubs his hand, “where do we begin?”


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30 responses to “Daiquiri Dreams”

  1. And so the plot thickens…I am most intrigued by how Ramshackle can morph his face into something the other person will be comfortable with

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    1. Can you tell I had fun creating Ramshackle?

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  2. Monidipa Dutta Avatar
    Monidipa Dutta

    I get the discomfort that’s building up in the scene. Ramshackle’s character feels detached, almost otherworldly, as he watches the man stumble into this contract, thinking it’s just another deal. The setting—familiar yet degraded—adds to the tension, especially with how easily the man agrees, despite the obvious risks. It feels almost predatory in a way, with Ramshackle offering desires at the cost of something irreversible. There’s a dark power dynamic here that leaves me feeling unsettled but curious about where this will lead.

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  3. This is ominous! ‘Certain needs’ has me wondering.

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  4. I love everything about this story and i mean everything! The plot gets murkier and murkier, I mean thicker and thicker!

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    1. Aaaah thank you for making my day Mayuri ❤

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  5. “Had Ramshackle been human”, this one line gave me goosebumps. I am intrigued to know more now.

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    1. Hope you enjoy the mystery!

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  6. I liked your description of the bar’s atmosphere. If I were to adapt your story into a movie or a netflix series, I’d definitely use a sepia tone for all 26 episodes – it really fits!!

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    1. Huh sepia tone – interesting. I think it would be cool if we see the current timeline in colours and the past in sepia 🙂

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  7. I was hoping to find out what Kilney’s contract entailed. But we’re some time in the future then? Or is this a parallel universe?

    Moving to the next episode right away.

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    1. This is more in the past, not really Kilney contract.

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  8. Preeti Chauhan Avatar
    Preeti Chauhan

    You grabbed my attention with that narration and the title!

    This is so edge of the seat reading, Guvnor 😉

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    1. Hahah good one. So happy to read this, Guvnor 😀

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  9. In awe of the way you write. I find fiction writing so daunting and you do it so effortlessly.

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    1. Thank you so much 🙂

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  10. I wonder how this leech of a man is connected with Kilney and his story..
    I could feel my skin crawl with his appearance, his behaviour and his intentions.. damn! People do use Ramshackle’s services for anything and everything it seems

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    1. That’s true, Ramshackle does not discriminate in that sense.

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  11. Chilling and atmospheric! The tension builds beautifully, and Ramshackle is such a fascinating enigma. That final line gave me goosebumps—brilliantly done!

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    1. Thanks Neerja.

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  12. Absolutely loving the way the mystery unfolds- utterly captivating. Eagerly waiting for tomorrow!

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    1. This made my day, thank you ❤

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  13. Quite a horror! Your narrative captures the reader’s attenetion totally.

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    1. That’s very kind, thank you!

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  14. Deepti Menon Avatar
    Deepti Menon

    Gosh, this is getting more sinister by the day! I can’t wait to see what the end looks like. Great going, Suchita!

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    1. You’re very kind, thank you 🙂

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  15. Srivalli Rekha Avatar
    Srivalli Rekha

    Ah! A sneak peek into the past. Almost pitying Ramshackle for the kind of requests he gets. At least, the terms are solid. 😀

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    1. Hahaha that’s true

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